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2017-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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What are some challenges you think the next generation will face? I think that the next generation will feel difficult in finding jobs nowdays 4 th industrial revolution takes place. and AI is connected with diverse area. Robot connected with AI is wiser and have no faulty. so Robot will be taken place with man in the working area. And man will lose their jobs. It is so important thing to man. we should prepare about that. man have to change their thinking and they have to find what they do.

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What are some challenges you think the next generation will face?
>>correct
I think that the next generation will feel difficult in finding jobs

>>I think that the next generation will have a difficulty in finding jobs.
 nowdays 4 th industrial revolution takes place.

>>Nowadays, the 4th industrial revolution is taking place.

 and AI is connected with diverse area.

>>correct

 Robot connected with AI is wiser and have no faulty.

>>Robots are connected to AI which doesn\'t make any mistakes.

 so Robot will be taken place with man in the working area.

>>So robots will take over man\'s place.

And man will lose their jobs.

>>And men will lose their jobs.

It is so important thing to man.

>>It is an important thing to man.

we should prepare about that.

>>We should prepare for it.

 man have to change their thinking and they have to find what they do.

>>Man should change their way of thinking and they have to find what they can do.

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