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2017-10-10 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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What do you do once in a blue moon? Why is that? ==> I occasionally go to health center in my village. The gym is that I registered one year ticket. Unfortunately It is very difficult to go there 3 times a week. I want to go there everyday but I don't have enough time for my life so I cannot go there everyday. Nowadays I go to the gym once a week because I have many business trips and works. When I am in Gumi, I come back home late. So I cannot make times to go there. Sometimes I have business trips so I have to skip exercising. As I am older and older, I have to loose my weight and I have to keep the health. On the purpose of that, I registered the gym in my village. I have to go there after work but there are many things to do after work. So it is difficult to go there. Anyway, for my health, I have to change my mind and I have to go there regularly. Exercising will give me a longer and happy life after retirement.

강사 첨삭

WELCOME! Welcome back, James! This is how you do it! Thanks for making me proud again.

You have confessed here, so I ought to thank you. Exercise is very important but given your hectic schedule, it can be tough. I just hope you\'ll have more time for it later.

No worries. Walking is also a form of exercise. Watch your diet, too, my friend. Take some rest whenever you can.

ALL THE BEST!

-Klein-

What do you do once in a blue moon? Why is that?
 ==>
 I occasionally go to health center in my village.

 >>Correct
 The gym is that I registered one year ticket.

 >>The gym that I registered in is for one year.
 Unfortunately It is very difficult to go there 3 times a week.
 
>>Correct (capitalization: it)

I want to go there everyday but I don\'t have enough time for my life so I cannot go there everyday.
 
>>I want to go there every day but I don\'t have enough time.

Nowadays I go to the gym once a week because I have many business trips and works.
 
>>Nowadays, I go to the gym once a week because I have many business trips and so much work.

When I am in Gumi, I come back home late. So I cannot make times to go there.
 
>>When I am in Gumi, I come back home late, so I cannot make time for it.

Sometimes I have business trips so I have to skip exercising.
 
>>Correct

As I am older and older, I have to loose my weight and I have to keep the health.
 
>>As I get older and older, I have to lose weight to keep my health.

On the purpose of that, I registered the gym in my village.
 
>>For that purpose, I registered in the gym in my village.

I have to go there after work but there are many things to do after work.
 
>>Correct

So it is difficult to go there.
 
>>Correct

Anyway, for my health, I have to change my mind and I have to go there regularly.
 
>>Correct

Exercising will give me a longer and happy life after retirement.

 >>Correct

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