homework

2017-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

학생이 쓴 원문

Describe yourself in five or more sentences. I am a tall and handsome boy. My hobby is making something ,playing basketball and riding a bike. My favorite subject is art. Because art can show my creativity. I am learning English and Chinese. It is not easy for me to learn two languages at the same time. My mom says that I am young and have lots of time to learn things so have to try hard for given things. Anyway I like to talk to people from other countries. I want to be a hero like "Ironman". It's my favorite character.

강사 첨삭


Hey Kiddo? How\'s your day? I hope your mom is okay.

You are such a good kid to be with your mom in this difficult time in her life.


Thank you for consistently doing your homework.

Your answer made me know you more.

Your are still a kid, yet you are so mature in many ways.


Take care. See you tomorrow!

T. Amanda ^-^



I am a tall and handsome boy.

>> Correct

My hobby is making something, playing basketball and riding a bike.

>> OR: My hobbies are making or inventing something, playing basketball and riding a bike.


My favorite subject is art. Because art can show my creativity.

>> My favorite subject is Arts because it gives my opportunities to showcase my creativity.


I am learning English and Chinese.

>> Correct

>> OR: I am studying English and Chinese.

It is not easy for me to learn two languages at the same time.

>> Correct

My mom says that I am young and have lots of time to learn things so have to try hard for given things.

>>My mom says that I am young which give me ample time to learn things, so I have to try hard to do the things that are expected of me.


Anyway, I like to talk to people from other countries.

>> Correct

>> OR: Anyway, I would like to be able to talk to other nationalities, and studying English and Chinese would make that possible.


 I want to be a hero like \"Ironman\".

>> Correct

It\'s my favorite character.

>> He\'s my favorite character.

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