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In my opinion, aiming perfection usually makes good result. Many people can't pursue their original goal and easily forget their passion. I'm also a that kind of person so I often found myself compromising with many things. This tendency is getting worse when people set easy goal from the start. There is a saying 'A person aiming the sun can reach clouds but a person aiming clouds never reach the clouds'. I think this saying means that pursuing the perfection is generally a good thing. On this point of view, perfection is something to be admired and sought after. However this can't be the solution in every situations. If people pursue perfection in wrong areas which they can't actually be perfect, they will fail and be exhausted eventually. Therefore deciding which goal is fit for aiming perfection and which is not is important before we admire perfection.
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Hi, [이름]!
It\'s a relatively slow day at my workplace today.
I\'m happy about it. kkk.
Thanks for taking the time to write this awesome essay.
I think aiming for perfection is a very good motivation to always do your best.
I always do this when I want to achieve something.
Anyhow, this is just in my perspective.
I hope you\'re doing great. See you tomorrow. ^_^
~Teacher Charry
In my opinion, aiming perfection usually makes good result.
>> In my opinion, aiming perfection usually makes a good result.
Many people can\'t pursue their original goal and easily forget their passion.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many people find it hard to pursue their original goal and easily forget their passion.
I\'m also a that kind of person so I often found myself compromising with many things.
>> I\'m also that kind of person so I often find myself compromising with many things.
This tendency is getting worse when people set easy goal from the start.
>> This tendency gets worse when people set easy goal from the start.
There is a saying \'A person aiming the sun can reach clouds but a person aiming clouds never reach the clouds\'.
>> There is a saying, \'a person aiming for the sun can reach the clouds but a person aiming for the clouds can never reach the clouds\'.
I think this saying means that pursuing the perfection is generally a good thing.
>> I think this saying means that pursuing perfection is generally a good thing.
On this point of view, perfection is something to be admired and sought after.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> On this perspective, perfection is something to be admired and sought after.
However this can\'t be the solution in every situations.
>> However, this can\'t be the solution in every situation.
If people pursue perfection in wrong areas which they can\'t actually be perfect, they will fail and be exhausted eventually.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If people pursue perfection in wrong areas which they can\'t actually be perfect at, they will eventually fail and be exhausted.
Therefore deciding which goal is fit for aiming perfection and which is not is important before we admire perfection.
>> Therefore, deciding which goal fits in aiming perfection and deciding which are not are important before we admire perfection.
It\'s a relatively slow day at my workplace today.
I\'m happy about it. kkk.
Thanks for taking the time to write this awesome essay.
I think aiming for perfection is a very good motivation to always do your best.
I always do this when I want to achieve something.
Anyhow, this is just in my perspective.
I hope you\'re doing great. See you tomorrow. ^_^
~Teacher Charry
In my opinion, aiming perfection usually makes good result.
>> In my opinion, aiming perfection usually makes a good result.
Many people can\'t pursue their original goal and easily forget their passion.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many people find it hard to pursue their original goal and easily forget their passion.
I\'m also a that kind of person so I often found myself compromising with many things.
>> I\'m also that kind of person so I often find myself compromising with many things.
This tendency is getting worse when people set easy goal from the start.
>> This tendency gets worse when people set easy goal from the start.
There is a saying \'A person aiming the sun can reach clouds but a person aiming clouds never reach the clouds\'.
>> There is a saying, \'a person aiming for the sun can reach the clouds but a person aiming for the clouds can never reach the clouds\'.
I think this saying means that pursuing the perfection is generally a good thing.
>> I think this saying means that pursuing perfection is generally a good thing.
On this point of view, perfection is something to be admired and sought after.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> On this perspective, perfection is something to be admired and sought after.
However this can\'t be the solution in every situations.
>> However, this can\'t be the solution in every situation.
If people pursue perfection in wrong areas which they can\'t actually be perfect, they will fail and be exhausted eventually.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If people pursue perfection in wrong areas which they can\'t actually be perfect at, they will eventually fail and be exhausted.
Therefore deciding which goal is fit for aiming perfection and which is not is important before we admire perfection.
>> Therefore, deciding which goal fits in aiming perfection and deciding which are not are important before we admire perfection.
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