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2017-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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8/30 Do you think mobile telephones are dangerous in any way? Yes, I gree with the statement.Mobile telephones make us convenient but it also put us in danger. We use them everywhere even on the street. So Sometimes we don't see cars coming to us and we easilly bump to others. We need to know where we use the phone properly.

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I agree MISS [이름]!

Mobile phones are making our life easier.

However, they could bring harm to us if not used properly. ^^,

8/30 Do you think mobile telephones are dangerous in any way?

Yes, I gree with the statement.

>>> Correct! [agree]

Mobile telephones make us convenient but
it also put us in danger.

>>> Mobile telephones give us convenience but they also put us in danger.

We use them everywhere even on the street.

>>> Correct!

So Sometimes we don\'t see cars coming to us and we easilly bump to others.

>>> OR: So sometimes we get into an accident. [easily]
We need to know where we use the phone properly.

>>> We need to know where and when to use our phones.

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