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2017-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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9/8What are the things that you would do if you are a famous person? If I am a famous person.. first, I want to wear lots of clothes. Some companies will provide me many clothes to wear. Second, I want to make money using my fame.hehe But I don't really want to be a famous person even though I can earn alot of money becaause whatever I do, it will effect many people. I don't want to take big resposibilty..hehe

강사 첨삭

Hi there MISS [이름]!

The first thing I would do if I were a famous person would be buying a house in a beautiful and peaceful place.

I\'ve been dreaming to have my own house which is overlooking the beauty of nature. C\")

See you later!

~Teacher Shanee^^,


9/8What are the things that you would do if you are a famous person?

If I am a famous person..

 first, I want to wear lots of clothes.

>>> OR: If I were a famous person, first, I would wear lots of clothes.

Some companies will provide me many clothes to wear.
 Second, I want to make money using my fame.hehe
>>> Second, I would make money using fame.
But I don\'t really want to be a famous person even though I can earn alot of money becaause whatever I do, it will effect many people.

>>> But I don\'t really want to be a famous person even though I can earn a lot of money because whatever I do, it will effect many people. [spacing]
 I don\'t want to take big resposibilty..hehe

>>> I don\'t want to take big a responsibility. hehe 

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