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Our ancestors used to prioritize officials, farmers, manufacturers and merchants in order.
It means agriculture was considered relatively important in the past.
Today, most youths are moving away from the countryside in order to study and get a job in cities.
In general, farming doesn't produce a lot of income given its hard work.
What's more, young people seem to dislike having deeply suntanned face because they don't think it is a decent job.
In fact, the rural life lacks cultural activities and benefits.
Since most young people have left their rural hometown, the countryside population has been decreasing day by day.
The phenomenon has caused no baby's crying and a great number of elementary school's shutdowns in the rural area.
If the current workforce, old people die, who will live and farm out there?
We first have to change a small scale and inefficient farming into a big and scientific one called smart farming.
Rural communities should be fostered newly so that young people can come back to their hometown.
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Our ancestors used to prioritize officials, farmers, manufacturers and merchants in order.
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It means agriculture was considered relatively important in the past.
It means agriculture was considered relatively important in the past.
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Today, most youths are moving away from the countryside in order to study and get a job in cities.
Today, most youths are moving away from the countryside in order to study and get a job in cities.
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In general, farming doesn\'t produce a lot of income given its hard work.
In general, farming doesn\'t produce a lot of income given its hard work.
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What\'s more, young people seem to dislike having deeply suntanned face because they don\'t think it is a decent job.
What\'s more, young people seem to dislike having deeply suntanned face because they don\'t think it is a decent job.
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In fact, the rural life lacks cultural activities and benefits.
In fact, the rural life lacks cultural activities and benefits.
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Since most young people have left their rural hometown, the countryside population has been decreasing day by day.
Since most young people have left their rural hometown, the countryside population has been decreasing day by day.
>> CORRECT
The phenomenon has caused no baby\'s crying and a great number of elementary school\'s shutdowns in the rural area.
The phenomenon has caused no baby\'s crying and a great number of elementary school\'s shutdowns in the rural area.
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If the current workforce, old people die, who will live and farm out there?
If the current workforce, old people die, who will live and farm out there?
>> CORRECT
We first have to change a small scale and inefficient farming into a big and scientific one called smart farming.
We first have to change a small scale and inefficient farming into a big and scientific one called smart farming.
>> CORRECT
Rural communities should be fostered newly so that young people can come back to their hometown.
Rural communities should be fostered newly so that young people can come back to their hometown.
>> CORRECT
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