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2017-10-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Hello how was your weekend??? i spent good weekends very well Last Sunday was my day off . so as i told you i went to korean BBQ restaurant to eat a Pork Belly with my girlfriend ! it wasn`t just typical the pork belly it was the best the pork Belly i`ve ever had in Sydney. maybe we`ll go there again or not after eating it , we went to inspect a house which have to live . it turned out a house owner was same person i knew . somehow when i saw from a distance , she`s very familer . i was so shocked that she was in there Ah we used to work together one year ago in korean restaurant I realized it really is a small world ! Writing task: Should companies ban their employees from using social networking sites at work? Answer in FIVE (5) sentences. Companies should allow to their employees to use social networking sites at work It`s not good too much work sometimes you have to work as resting and checking a phone Otherwise i guess you`ll get stressed .

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!^^

I\'m glad that you had blast last weekend. It\'s really important to find time to rest and enjoy after working hard. Anyway, that pork belly must be delectable.^^

~Kelly^^

Hello how was your weekend??? 

>> Hello! How was your weekend?

i spent good weekends very well 

>> I spent a good weekend.

>> I spent my weekend very well.
Last Sunday was my day off .

>> Correct.

so as i told you i went to korean BBQ restaurant to eat a Pork Belly with my girlfriend ! 

>> So, as i told you, I went to a Korean BBQ restaurant to eat pork belly with my girlfriend! 

it wasn`t just typical the pork belly it was the best the pork Belly i`ve ever had in Sydney. 

>> It wasn\'t just a typical pork belly; it was the best pork belly I\'ve ever had in Sydney. 

maybe we`ll go there again or not after eating it , we went to inspect a house which have to live .

>> Maybe, we will go there again, not to eat pork belly, but, we want to inspect a house where we have to live.

it turned out a house owner was same person i knew . 

>> It turned out that I know the owner of the house.

somehow when i saw from a distance , she`s very familer .

>> When I saw her from a distance, she looked familiar.

i was so shocked that she was in there 

>> I was so shocked that she was in there.
Ah we used to work together one year ago in korean restaurant 

>> We used to work together in a Korean restaurant.
I realized it really is a small world !

>> I realized it really is a small world! 
Writing task: Should companies ban their employees from using social networking sites at work? Answer in FIVE (5) sentences.
Companies should allow to their employees to use social networking sites at work 

>> Companies should allow their employees to use social networking sites at work.
It`s not good too much work sometimes you have to work as resting and checking a phone 

>> It\'s not good to work too much, sometimes you have find time to rest and check your phone. 
Otherwise i guess you`ll get stressed .

>> Otherwise, I guess you\'ll get stress.

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