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2017-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Writing task: Is there a special gift you like to get? Answer in FIVE (5) sentences. I want to get a new bike for my birthday gift. Because,my friends are all expensive and have special system. But, my bike is old and not good to commend my friend's bikes. So, I want to my new bike next year.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, [이름]!

I know that you enjoy riding a bike with your friends. I also hope that you can receive a bike on your birthday, so you can travel to more places with your friends.^^

~t. Kelly^^

Writing task: Is there a special gift you like to get? Answer in FIVE (5) sentences.
I want to get a new bike for my birthday gift.

>> I want to get a new bike for my birthday.
Because,my friends are all expensive and have special system.

>> Because my friends bikes are all expensive with special system.
But, my bike is old and not good to commend my friend\'s bikes.

>> But, my bike is old and not nice compared to my friends bikes.
So, I want to my new bike next year.

>> So, I want to buy a new bike next year.

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