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In my opinion, Korea's current education system doesn't encourage Koreans to admit our lack of knowledge. My experiences can be examples of this matter. First of all, all students are focusing on how to get a good grade in exams. Because the educational system judges students only with exam scores. In this situation, admitting my lack of knowledge would be my flaw and it's not a good thing at all. No one will care whether you know the knowledge correctly or not as long as you pick the right answer. Second, students' performance in exams decide too many things in their whole lives. Scores in exams not only decide just schools but future incomes. Therefore students' usually don't have much time to do other things and are busy to show off their knowledge. I don't think this tendency will be changed easily since it's related with other social factors. People who truly learn something will not be afraid to admit their lack of knowledge but it's not common here in Korea now.
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Hello there [이름]!
Wow! This essay is amazing! Thank you for writing it.
I think you\'re a very honest girl.
In addition to that, your opinions were on point.
To be honest, I think living in Korea is difficult not only because of the economic situation but also because of the constant pressure that the people get from the society.
I think that\'s sad.
Anyhow, I\'m happy to know that you\'re an open-minded person.
I hope everything goes well for you in your career so you could get out as soon as possible.
Stay happy and safe.
I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry :)
In my opinion, Korea\'s current education system doesn\'t encourage Koreans to admit our lack of knowledge.
>> In my opinion, Korea\'s current education system doesn\'t encourage Koreans to admit their lack of knowledge.
My experiences can be examples of this matter.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> My experiences can be examples for this matter.
First of all, all students are focusing on how to get a good grade in exams.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> First of all, all students mainly focus on how to get an excellent grade in exams.
Because the educational system judges students only with exam scores.
>> This is because the educational system judges students only with exam scores.
In this situation, admitting my lack of knowledge would be my flaw and it\'s not a good thing at all.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In this circumstance, admitting my lack of knowledge would be my flaw and it\'s not a good thing at all.
No one will care whether you know the knowledge correctly or not as long as you pick the right answer.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> No one will bother to question you whether you know the knowledge correctly or not as long as you pick the right answer.
Second, students\' performance in exams decide too many things in their whole lives.
>> [Do you mean]: Second, students\' performance in exams affect too many things in their whole lives.
Scores in exams not only decide just schools but future incomes.
>> Scores in exams not only decide the schools a student will be attending but would also predict future incomes.
Therefore students\' usually don\'t have much time to do other things and are busy to show off their knowledge.
>> Therefore, students usually don\'t have much time to do other things and are busy to show off their knowledge.
I don\'t think this tendency will be changed easily since it\'s related with other social factors.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The way I see it, this way of living will not easily change since it\'s related with other social factors.
People who truly learn something will not be afraid to admit their lack of knowledge but it\'s not common here in Korea now.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> People who are truly learning something will not be afraid to admit their lack of knowledge but it\'s not common here in Korea now.
Wow! This essay is amazing! Thank you for writing it.
I think you\'re a very honest girl.
In addition to that, your opinions were on point.
To be honest, I think living in Korea is difficult not only because of the economic situation but also because of the constant pressure that the people get from the society.
I think that\'s sad.
Anyhow, I\'m happy to know that you\'re an open-minded person.
I hope everything goes well for you in your career so you could get out as soon as possible.
Stay happy and safe.
I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry :)
In my opinion, Korea\'s current education system doesn\'t encourage Koreans to admit our lack of knowledge.
>> In my opinion, Korea\'s current education system doesn\'t encourage Koreans to admit their lack of knowledge.
My experiences can be examples of this matter.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> My experiences can be examples for this matter.
First of all, all students are focusing on how to get a good grade in exams.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> First of all, all students mainly focus on how to get an excellent grade in exams.
Because the educational system judges students only with exam scores.
>> This is because the educational system judges students only with exam scores.
In this situation, admitting my lack of knowledge would be my flaw and it\'s not a good thing at all.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In this circumstance, admitting my lack of knowledge would be my flaw and it\'s not a good thing at all.
No one will care whether you know the knowledge correctly or not as long as you pick the right answer.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> No one will bother to question you whether you know the knowledge correctly or not as long as you pick the right answer.
Second, students\' performance in exams decide too many things in their whole lives.
>> [Do you mean]: Second, students\' performance in exams affect too many things in their whole lives.
Scores in exams not only decide just schools but future incomes.
>> Scores in exams not only decide the schools a student will be attending but would also predict future incomes.
Therefore students\' usually don\'t have much time to do other things and are busy to show off their knowledge.
>> Therefore, students usually don\'t have much time to do other things and are busy to show off their knowledge.
I don\'t think this tendency will be changed easily since it\'s related with other social factors.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The way I see it, this way of living will not easily change since it\'s related with other social factors.
People who truly learn something will not be afraid to admit their lack of knowledge but it\'s not common here in Korea now.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> People who are truly learning something will not be afraid to admit their lack of knowledge but it\'s not common here in Korea now.
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