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2017-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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I think television violence gives our children a negative effect. We can see many actors that very handsome but are violent. Our children think they are very nice and believe that is good. I hope that only watching beautiful. Thank you. [이름]

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thank you for your opinion about violent TV programs. We should choose the TV shows we allow our children to watch.^^

Enjoy the rest of your day.

~Kelly^^

I think television violence gives our children a negative effect.

>> Correct.
We can see many actors that very handsome but are violent.

>> We can see many actors that are very handsome but violent.
Our children think they are very nice and believe that is good.

>> Our children think they are very nice and believe what they do is good.
I hope that only watching beautiful.

>> I hope they only watch good and nice programs on TV.
Thank you.

>> Correct.
See you later.

>> Correct.

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