homework
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Many people believe that television violence has a negative effect on society because it promotes violence. Do you agree or disagree? Explain your answer in not more than FIVE (5) sentences.
I am agree.
Because,people who seeing this program can commit a crimes.
So,many people died by criminal.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your opinion about television violence. Keep on practicing to improve your English skills.
Have a fun day!
~t. Kelly^^
Many people believe that television violence has a negative effect on society because it promotes violence. Do you agree or disagree? Explain your answer in not more than FIVE (5) sentences.
I am agree.
>> I agree in this statement.
Because,people who seeing this program can commit a crimes.
>> Because of these programs, people can commit crimes.
So,many people died by criminal.
>> So, criminals kill many people.
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