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2017-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

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When it comes to next years' specific goals, they could be the same as my next years' resolutions. Firstly, I have to be employed again for my current job, an adviser of CEO. My present temporary position should be renewed by the company every year. I will continuously have to report something beneficial to my boss and company. Secondly, I want to participate in a lot of Christian activities including volunteer services next year. Since moving here, I have recently had to change a church that I serve. I hope to get along with my cell members who I have never met yet. Thirdly, I want to improve my English proficiency. Especially, I will often have to watch CNN and American dramas. Fourthly, I will read more than a book a week. It seems that I have read three books a month so far. Lastly, I have to lose my weight for my health. I will so often have to climb the mountain with Rookie and eat way less than now. These are not only my five specific goals but also my resolutions for next year.

강사 첨삭

HELLO MR. [이름],
Thank you for sharing your five specific goals for next year.
I know that you will reach all your goals because you are a very diligent person.
Have a nice day ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
When it comes to next years\' specific goals, they could be the same as my next years\' resolutions.
>> CORRECT 
Firstly, I have to be employed again for my current job, an adviser of CEO.
>> CORRECT 
My present temporary position should be renewed by the company every year.
>> CORRECT 
I will continuously have to report something beneficial to my boss and company. 
>> CORRECT 
Secondly, I want to participate in a lot of Christian activities including volunteer services next year.
>> CORRECT 
Since moving here, I have recently had to change a church that I serve.
>> CORRECT 
I hope to get along with my cell members who I have never met yet.
>> CORRECT 
Thirdly, I want to improve my English proficiency.
>> CORRECT 
Especially, I will often have to watch CNN and American dramas.
>> CORRECT 
Fourthly, I will read more than a book a week.
>> CORRECT 
It seems that I have read three books a month so far.
>> CORRECT 
Lastly, I have to lose my weight for my health.
>> CORRECT 
I will so often have to climb the mountain with Rookie and eat way less than now.
>> CORRECT 
These are not only my five specific goals but also my resolutions for next year.
>> CORRECT 

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