homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello!
My goals that I want to accomplish are below.
Firstly, I want to speak English fluency, so that I will continue learning English. But these days I feel my speaking is inactivity.
Secondly, I want to get a promotion. So I need to complete my report of result for this year better than before.
Thirdly, this goal may not to easy accomplish in the next year, because I will give birth to my second baby in the next year. I want to work back to china with my children. I want to let my children study Chinese. Because, it is easy to learn a new language in that country where the people use the language as their mother language.
Fourthly, I think it will be my last goal in this life, I want to become a richer.
강사 첨삭
HELLO [이름],
Thank you for sharing your five specific goals for next year.
I know that you will reach all your goals because you are a very diligent person.
Have a nice day ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
Hello!
>>
My goals that I want to accomplish are below.
My goals that I want to accomplish are below.
>> These are my following goals that I want to accomplish.
Firstly, I want to speak English fluency, so that I will continue learning English. But these days I feel my speaking is inactivity.
Firstly, I want to speak English fluency, so that I will continue learning English. But these days I feel my speaking is inactivity.
>> Firstly, I want to speak fluently in English but I feel that I am not improving.
Secondly, I want to get a promotion.
Secondly, I want to get a promotion.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: Secondly, I want to be promoted.
So I need to complete my report of result for this year better than before.
>> As a result, I need to complete my reports better than before.
Thirdly, this goal may not to easy accomplish in the next year, because I will give birth to my second baby in the next year.
Thirdly, this goal may not to easy accomplish in the next year, because I will give birth to my second baby in the next year.
>> Thirdly, it\'s difficult to accomplish this goal because I\'m going to deliver my second baby by next year.
I want to work back to china with my children.
>> I want to go back to China with my children.
I want to let my children study Chinese. Because, it is easy to learn a new language in that country where the people use the language as their mother language.
>> I want my children to learn Chinese because learning the language of one country is much easier when you use it often.
Fourthly, I think it will be my last goal in this life, I want to become a richer.
Fourthly, I think it will be my last goal in this life, I want to become a richer.
>> Lastly, I want to get rich. This is the ultimate goal I want to accomplish in my life.
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