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Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic.
Freedom in whatever form it is, come with responsibility and accountability.
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T. Glenda
All the people who lives on earth have a right of Freedom expression.
>> All the people who lives on earth have the right of Freedom expression.
So, when people have their own opinions, they can claim their idea even if it is a criticism about government.
>> Correct
By doing so , The government and their citizen can lead the country for the better place. however, It also have disadventiges.
>> By doing so, the government and their citizen can lead the country for a better place however, it also has disadvantages.
Some people enjoy to censure all of things behind without any basis,whether the victims are distressed or not distressed by that unbasis criticism.
>> Some people enjoy to censure all of things behind without any basis, whether the victims are distressed or not distressed by that criticism.
So, If people want to have the Freedom of sxpression, they have to look back on themselves, and they need to have empathy with another people.
>> So, If people want to have the Freedom of expression, they have to look back on themselves, and they need to have empathy with other people.
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