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2017-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

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I often feel embarrassed and even disgusted whenever I see young lovers express their love in public such as in the subway cabin, on the escalator of a department store and so on. I deeply feel deplorable whenever I hear some youths mistreat the elderly people and even their parents. Even though I advocate women's human rights, I surely feel horrible whenever I notice some tough women lash out at poor men in the market area. Although I agree that even a few people's voices should be respected, I strongly feel regrettable whenever I hear the angry crowd curse the president who was elected. In the past, we cherished some notions with care such as etiquette, decency, loyalty, filial duty and so forth. With the development of modern society losing our traditional ways of life, keeping them has become significant more and more. There is no short cut that we can keep them in our society. However, restoration of our home discipline or education is one of the most effective methods to keep the precious traditional ways of life in our community.

강사 첨삭

HELLO MR. [이름],
Thank you for doing your homework.
Have a nice day ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
I often feel embarrassed and even disgusted whenever I see young lovers express their love in public such as in the subway cabin, on the escalator of a department store and so on.
>> CORRECT 
I deeply feel deplorable whenever I hear some youths mistreat the elderly people and even their parents.
>> CORRECT 
Even though I advocate women\'s human rights, I surely feel horrible whenever I notice some tough women lash out at poor men in the market area.
>> CORRECT 
Although I agree that even a few people\'s voices should be respected, I strongly feel regrettable whenever I hear the angry crowd curse the president who was elected. 
>> CORRECT 
In the past, we cherished some notions with care such as etiquette, decency, loyalty, filial duty and so forth.
>> CORRECT 
With the development of modern society losing our traditional ways of life, keeping them has become significant more and more. 
>> CORRECT 
There is no short cut that we can keep them in our society.
>> CORRECT 
However, restoration of our home discipline or education is one of the most effective methods to keep the precious traditional ways of life in our community.
>> CORRECT 


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