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2017-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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In what ways have families in your country changed in recent years? When I was in the army, I saw that how much parents are overly involved with children whether they are adult or not. Most people who are younger than me in army wanted parents to help them even if they are 20s. I couldn't understand that. But I realized soon that it had changed ways have families. And these days there are people who help from parents to 30s.

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In what ways have families in your country changed in recent years?
When I was in the army, I saw that how much parents are overly involved with children whether they are adult or not.

>>When I was in the army, I saw how parents were overly involved with children whether they are adult or not.

Most people who are younger than me in army wanted parents to help them even if they are 20s.

>>Most people who are younger than me in army wanted their parents to help them even if they are in their 20s.
I couldn\'t understand that.

>>CORRECT!

But I realized soon that it had changed ways have families. And these days there are people who help from parents to 30s.

>>However, I realized soon that it had changed the ways families have lived, and these days, there are still people who get help from their parents in their 30s.

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