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I agree that people are often trapped in their own ideas. Previous knowledge is precious and we can't just abandon them easily. What we learned from previous experiences and assumptions we have are important source of making decisions. However I also think previous knowledge sometimes make our sight narrow. I prefer taking a subway to bus because subway is more punctual than bus in general. I once had to visit a place where I had never been and I only tried to find the way by subway. I never thought how I could go their with bus because I omitted taking a bus option. The problem was that I didn't omit the bus option not because it would take more time but I had my own prejudice which is 'bus is slower than subway'. However it turned out I could have used a bus and bus was more convenient and fast to reach the destination. There is a possibility I might miss the better option due to my previous knowledge or ideas so trying to reject them intentionally often works well.
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Hi, [이름]!
Today is not so different from yesterday.
It\'s still busy at my workplace. kkk.
Anyhow, thank you for taking the time to write an essay.
I agree that our valuable knowledge should not be forgotten but I also believe that we should give a new idea a shot once in a while.
This is how we can actually acquire new and valuable knowledge.
Many people are afraid to try because the fear that they might make a mistake.
However, I think that\'s the whole point of this process.
I hope you\'re doing great. See you tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry ^^
I agree that people are often trapped in their own ideas. >> CORRECT!
OR >> It is true that people are often trapped in their own ideas.
Previous knowledge is precious and we can\'t just abandon them easily.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Previous knowledge is precious so we can\'t just forget them easily.
What we learned from previous experiences and assumptions we have are important source of making decisions.
>> What we learned from previous experiences and assumptions we had are important sources in making decisions.
However I also think previous knowledge sometimes make our sight narrow.
>> However, I also think previous knowledge sometimes makes our sight narrow.
I prefer taking a subway to bus because subway is more punctual than bus in general.
>> I prefer taking a subway over a bus because a subway is more punctual than a bus in general.
I once had to visit a place where I had never been and I only tried to find the way by subway.
>> I once had to visit a place I have never been to and I only tried to find the way by subway.
I never thought how I could go their with bus because I omitted taking a bus option.
>> I never thought of going their with a bus because I omitted taking a bus from my options.
The problem was that I didn\'t omit the bus option not because it would take more time but I had my own prejudice which is \'bus is slower than subway\'.
>> The problem was, that I didn\'t omit the bus from my option not because it would take more time but I had my own prejudice which is, \'the bus is slower than the subway\'.
However it turned out I could have used a bus and bus was more convenient and fast to reach the destination.
>> However, it turned out that I should have used a bus because riding a bus was more convenient and it was faster to reach the destination.
There is a possibility I might miss the better option due to my previous knowledge or ideas so trying to reject them intentionally often works well.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There is a chance that I might miss the better option due to my previous knowledge or ideas so trying to reject them intentionally often works well.
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