homework
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There are many dangerous situations which can threat for children.
For example, pornography, violence, fraud, and so on.
We can install software on the computer and cellphone, then only permissioned people can access to the particular website.
Parents also have to supervise their children to access to the internet.
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Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
There are many dangerous situations which can threat for children.
>> There are many dangerous situations that are threatening for children.
For example, pornography, violence, fraud, and so on.
For example, pornography, violence, fraud, and so on.
>> For example: pornography, violence, fraud and so on.
We can install software on the computer and cellphone, then only permissioned people can access to the particular website.
We can install software on the computer and cellphone, then only permissioned people can access to the particular website.
>> We can install a software on the computer and cellphone so that only particularly people can access the websites.
Parents also have to supervise their children to access to the internet.
Parents also have to supervise their children to access to the internet.
>> Parents have to supervise their children to access the Internet.
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