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People can learn something not only from people we admire and respect but also from just others. In my opinion, if we see flaws from people we admire then the lesson would be more clear and powerful. I often see people admire a person himself/herself and consider the person is almost perfect. In that case, flaws about the admired person will be considered more seriously than flaws about other people. This kind of learning is based on too much expectation on the person though. I think it would be better that people distinguish good point to admire and other parts from one person. Because it's more easy to disappoint on that person and change the whole opinion if we put on too much expectation. In that case we might lose other good chance to learn many things from the person not only from flaws but also from other things. We can learn from everyone so there is no need to seek flaws from people we admire to get extra impact.
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Hello there [이름]! :)
Thank you for coming up with this essay.
Thank you for coming up with this essay.
I think you\'re getting better at it every day.
No one is perfect. I guess we are all aware of that but we often overlook that fact.
Even respectable and admired people are entitled to commit mistakes.
There\'s nothing wrong in making one.
Many of us just put too much emphasis and magnification to it.
It\'s still okay to admire the people we look up to even if they make mistakes.
After all, we are not perfect and so are they.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you in class tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry
People can learn something not only from people we admire and respect but also from just others. >> People can learn something not only from people they admire and respect but also from ordinary people.
In my opinion, if we see flaws from people we admire then the lesson would be more clear and powerful.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In my point-of-view, if we see flaws from people we admire then the lesson would be clearer and more powerful.
I often see people admire a person himself/herself and consider the person is almost perfect.
>> I often see people admire a person and consider the person as almost perfect.
In that case, flaws about the admired person will be considered more seriously than flaws about other people.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In that instance, flaws about the admired person will be taken more seriously than the flaws of other people.
This kind of learning is based on too much expectation on the person though.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> This kind of learning is rooted from/on too much expectation on the person though.
I think it would be better that people distinguish good point to admire and other parts from one person.
>> I think it would be better for people distinguish the good point to admire and the other parts from one person.
Because it\'s more easy to disappoint on that person and change the whole opinion if we put on too much expectation.
>> This is because it\'s more easy to get disappointed on that person and change the whole opinion if we put too much expectation on that person.
In that case we might lose other good chance to learn many things from the person not only from flaws but also from other things.
>> In that case we might lose other good chances to learn many things from the person not only from flaws but also from other things.
We can learn from everyone so there is no need to seek flaws from people we admire to get extra impact.
>> We can learn from everyone so there is no need to seek flaws from people we admire to get an extra impact.
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