Homework~!

2017-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Topic >Have modern advancements truly improved the quality of people's lives? . . Modern advancements improved the quality of people's lives. It caused mechinal automation. As a result it made people working more fast and accurate. That is improved the quality of peoples's lives. Overall, development of science is good for peoples, but I think all advancements does not helpful for our lives. First of all, mechinal development made automation. That means simple working is substituted by machine. For example, simple order substituted machines at restaurants, bank, movie theater... As a result, some people lost their job, and polarization is intensified. I think most people think modern development makes people lives more convenient,but actually that makes people's live bad.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sunny!

Thank you for taking the time to do your homework.

I\'m really happy. ^_^
I honestly think that technological advancements are good but once they are abused, they become bad for us.

A concrete example for this would be computers and smartphones.

If we don\'t use them properly, they can have a bad effect on us.

Anyway, I hope you\'re doing great. :)
See you again tomorrow.

That\'s it for today.

Take care always.

~Teacher Charry

Modern advancements improved the quality of people\'s lives.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Modern advancements had improved the quality of living.
It caused mechinal automation.

>> It caused mechanical automation.
As a result it made people working more fast and accurate.

>> As a result it made people work faster and more accurate.
That is improved the quality of peoples\'s lives.

>> That improved the quality of peoples\'s lives.
Overall, development of science is good for peoples, but I think all advancements does not helpful for our lives.

>> Overall, development of science is good for people but I think all advancements do not help in our lives.
First of all, mechinal development made automation. 

>> First of all, mechanical development made automation.
That means simple working is substituted by machine.

>> That means simple work is substituted by a machine.
For example, simple order substituted machines at restaurants, bank, movie theater... 

>> [Do you mean]: For example, simple ordering and transactions at restaurants, banks, and movie theater can be done through machines.
As a result, some people lost their job, and polarization is intensified.

>> As a result, some people lost their job and polarization was intensified.
I think most people think modern development makes people lives more convenient,but actually that makes people\'s live bad.

>> I think most people think that modern development makes people\'s lives more convenient but actually, that makes people\'s lives bad. 

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