HOMEWORK

Hi Allen!

I was excited to read your first composition.

I see a lot of potential here.

We can work on this and it would definitely help you prepare for the test.

Keep up the good work!^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

There are different opinions on how important the leisure activities are.

>> There are different opinions on how important leisure activities are.
In my opinion, the activities have positive effects and there are some reasons why leisure activities are important.

>> In my opinion, these activities have positive effects on people and there are several reasons why leisure activities are important.
Firstly, the leisure activities are one of the best ways releasing stresses.

>> Firstly, leisure activities are one of the best ways to relieve stress.
People can\'t work alway so they need some times to do something.

>> People can\'t just work all the time and they need to enjoy their lives.
The more important thing is feeling when people enjoy doing their hobbies.

>> Another important thing is the feeling of enjoyment that people get from engaging in their hobbies.
Secondly, the leisure activities are related to someone\'s economy.

>> Secondly, leisure activities are related to the country\'s economy. 
For example, most people spend their money doing some activities and the providers will earn the money through this process.

>> For example, when people spend their money doing some activities then providers of such services will earn money through the process.
This is about the industry of leisure and it makes the positive circle of the economy.

>> This is pertaining to the industry of leisure and it creates a positive cycle in the economy.
To sum it up, the leisure activities would influence our society and mind.

>> To sum it up, leisure activities influence our society\'s way of thinking.
Therefore people would need enough time to enjoy their hobbies.

>> Therefore people should have enough time to enjoy their hobbies.