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2017-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

She is my boss of the first academy. HEr quailities inspired me to bedome a good leader. At first, the leader has a professionism. The leader has insight on different situations but never authoritative and the leader is a part of arbitrator. Leadership jis xomething that is formed natually throught respect and expectaters from other people.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Ms. [이름]!

Thanks for your composition today! This was well-written. Great job! Keep it up!

T. JanE ^^

She is my boss of the first academy.

>> Correct

HEr quailities inspired me to become a good leader.

>> Correct

At first, the leader has a professionism.

>> First, a leader must be professional. 

The leader has insight on different situations but never authoritative and the leader is a part of arbitrator.

>> A leader must have an insight on different situation, but must never be authoritative. S/He must also be an arbitrator. 

Leadership is something that is formed natually throught respect and expectaters from other people.

>> Leadership is something that is formed naturally through respect and expectation from other people. 

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