HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
ESSAY: What are the things that you like to do that you haven\'t done it yet? Write 5-10 sentences to explain your answer.
First, I want to grow a dog.
Because my parents are say \"you don\'t grow dog. If we grow a dog, mom will do almost take care of dog.\" So I want to grow a dog.
Second, I want to buy a new cell phone.
Because my cell phone capacity is too small.
When I lay an application, I have to elimination. So l want to buy a new cellphone.
I\'m so sorry about I didn\'t do homework of yesterday. Forward I will do homework.
Bye~~
강사 첨삭
Hello AMY,
I am sorry to hear that you want to raise a dog but your mother doesn\'t like you to have one.
I think, raising a dog is really a hard work to do.
Dogs are like little children.
They poo and pee and every where.
So, I understand if your mother doesn\'t like you to have a pet at home.
Maybe in the future, if you are already grown up, you can take good care of your own pet. ;)
Have a nice day ahead!
Here are your corrections:
First, I want to grow a dog.
Because my parents are say \"you don\'t grow dog. If we grow a dog, mom will do almost take care of dog.\" So I want to grow a dog.
Because my parents are say \"you don\'t grow dog. If we grow a dog, mom will do almost take care of dog.\" So I want to grow a dog.
>> My parents told me that I can\'t raise a dog. If we will raise a dog, my mom will take good care of the dog most of the time but I really like to have a dog.
Second, I want to buy a new cell phone.
Second, I want to buy a new cell phone.
>> Secondly, I want to buy a new cellphone.
Because my cell phone capacity is too small.
Because my cell phone capacity is too small.
>> The memory of my cellphone is very low.
When I lay an application, I have to elimination. So l want to buy a new cellphone.
>> Every time I download an application, I have to delete some applications too that\'s the reason why I want to buy a new cellphone.
I\'m so sorry about I didn\'t do homework of yesterday. Forward I will do homework.
When I lay an application, I have to elimination. So l want to buy a new cellphone.
>> Every time I download an application, I have to delete some applications too that\'s the reason why I want to buy a new cellphone.
I\'m so sorry about I didn\'t do homework of yesterday. Forward I will do homework.
>> I\'m sorry if I didn\'t do my homework yesterday. I will send it to you now.
Bye~~
Bye~~
>> Good bye!
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