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I want to say that people shouldn't limit their possibility. However I also think it's not a realistic idea that people always should strive to improve themselves. I found out that opening too much possibilities in my life often makes me tired. People usually say I can do whatever I want if I try hard and it's never late to start something you really want to do. I agree that those words can give hope or positive energy. However I think there are some practical limitations in real life. For example, I don't think I can practice law in a courtroom as a lawyer in US, even if I finish LLM course and get a lawyer licence in US. Because there are already many lawyers in that country and my saying about US constitution would not be a remark carrying weight. It will be much better for me to find a job which I can use Korean lawyer licence in international organizations if I want to work abroad. In some ways, accepting who I am can be more practical way to live.
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Hi, [이름]!
It\'s good to read one of your essays again.
I loved reading about your thoughts and opinions.
I think we should pursue our goals but not to the extent of becoming unrealistic.
Personally, I am a goal-getter but I am also a realist.
Being realistic allows me to set and plan achievable goals and standards.
Anyhow, that\'s just my opinion about this matter.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry
I want to say that people shouldn\'t limit their possibility. >> CORRECT!
OR >> I would like to express that people shouldn\'t limit their possibility.
However I also think it\'s not a realistic idea that people always should strive to improve themselves.
>> However, I also think it\'s not a realistic idea that people should always strive to improve themselves.
I found out that opening too much possibilities in my life often makes me tired.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I realized that opening too many possibilities in my life often makes me tired.
People usually say I can do whatever I want if I try hard and it\'s never late to start something you really want to do.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> People often say that I can do whatever I want if I try hard and it\'s never late to start something you really want to do.
I agree that those words can give hope or positive energy.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It is true that those words can give hope or positive energy.
However I think there are some practical limitations in real life.
>> However, I think there are some practical limitations in real life.
For example, I don\'t think I can practice law in a courtroom as a lawyer in US, even if I finish LLM course and get a lawyer licence in US.
>> For example, I don\'t think I can practice law in a courtroom as a lawyer in the US, even if I finish the LLM course and get a lawyer\'s license in the US.
Because there are already many lawyers in that country and my saying about US constitution would not be a remark carrying weight.
>> [Do you mean]: It\'s because there are already many lawyers in that country and my opinion about the US constitution would not be a remark that carries any weight.
It will be much better for me to find a job which I can use Korean lawyer licence in international organizations if I want to work abroad.
>> It will be much better for me to find a job where I can use my Korean lawyer\'s license in international organizations if I want to work abroad.
In some ways, accepting who I am can be more practical way to live.
>> In some ways, accepting who I am can be a more practical way to live.
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