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I think the most effective factor which makes people change is a practical needs. I don't think people change much, especially toward good directions. It's hard to change habit but relatively easy to develop bad habits. For example, I always dragged my studying when I was in high school and never finished my studying before I started hanging out with friends or took a rest. I knew I should change the order between studying and fiddling but I couldn't follow what I thought. I changed that plan after I failed to enter the University at last. Like my case, urgent and practical need can change people fast. I know this is not that productive and positive way to change myself though. It's often too late to change myself after I realized I'm in a real trouble. Maybe having a long term goal or reminding someone who loves me can be more positive motivation to change.
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Hi, [이름]! :)
Thank you for imparting your opinion and your point-of-view about this matter.
I think change, although inevitable, is often feared by people.
I guess this has something to do with the fact that change often disturbs if not destroy our comfort zone.
It throws us off-balanced that it\'s sometimes difficult to get back on our feet again.
But I\'ve learned that change is the wife of great opportunities and success.
If you\'re not willing to change then opportunities and success would shy away from you.
Anyhow, this is my opinion regarding this matter.
I hope you\'re feeling happy and great today.
See you on Monday.
~Teacher Charry :)
I think the most effective factor which makes people change is a practical needs. >> I think the most effective factor which makes people change are practical needs.
I don\'t think people change much, especially toward good directions.
>> I don\'t think people change much especially towards good directions.
It\'s hard to change habit but relatively easy to develop bad habits.
>> It\'s hard to change a habit but it\'s relatively easy to develop bad habits.
For example, I always dragged my studying when I was in high school and never finished my studying before I started hanging out with friends or took a rest.
>> For example, I always dragged my self when studying when I was in high school and never finished studying before I started hanging out with my friends or took a rest.
I knew I should change the order between studying and fiddling but I couldn\'t follow what I thought.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I knew I should change the order between studying and fiddling but for some reason, I could not follow through.
I changed that plan after I failed to enter the University at last.
>> I changed that plan after I failed to enter the university.
Like my case, urgent and practical need can change people fast.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Just like in my case, urgent and practical need can change people fast.
I know this is not that productive and positive way to change myself though.
>> I know this is not that productive and not a positive way to change myself though.
It\'s often too late to change myself after I realized I\'m in a real trouble.
>> It\'s often too late to change myself after I realize that I\'m in real trouble.
Maybe having a long term goal or reminding someone who loves me can be more positive motivation to change.
>> Maybe having a long term goal or reminding someone who loves me can be a more positive motivation to change.
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