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I don't feel comfortable with cloning human. This is not because of religious reason but I can imagine how the rule of economics finally dominate the very essence of human. I think science and technology for human cloning will be finally under control of money. Even now, those scientists are working for corporations and they can never work for just fulfilling intellectual curiosity. Financial dependency on science and medical area is growing bigger. In the end, those corporations funding all those money will withdraw profit because that's the reason why they started funding. I personally think rich people can eventually buy organ or something related with human body. Not like any other products, these new products are directly related with human life. Therefore the result of the gap between rich and poor will be quite different with the gap we have seen before. I don't think that is a pretty scene and that's why I personally oppose to human cloning.
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Hi, [이름]!
I clearly understand why you are against human cloning.
I clearly understand why you are against human cloning.
Like any medical advancements, cloning has its pros and cons.
But in my point-of-view, the end will never justify the means.
It is true that human cloning can become very beneficial someday but it\'s the humans\' tendency to abuse things that is truly worrisome.
Anyhow, that is just my opinion.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you tomorrow in class. ^^
~Teacher Charry
I don\'t feel comfortable with cloning human. >> I don\'t feel comfortable with cloning a human.
This is not because of religious reason but I can imagine how the rule of economics finally dominate the very essence of human.
This is not because of religious reason but I can imagine how the rule of economics finally dominate the very essence of human.
>> This is not because of religious reasons but I can imagine how the rule of economics finally dominates the very essence of a human.
I think science and technology for human cloning will be finally under control of money.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think science and technology for human cloning will be finally under the influence of money.
Even now, those scientists are working for corporations and they can never work for just fulfilling intellectual curiosity.
>> Even now, those scientists are working for corporations and they can never work for the sake of just fulfilling their intellectual curiosity.
Financial dependency on science and medical area is growing bigger.
>> CORRECT!
In the end, those corporations funding all those money will withdraw profit because that\'s the reason why they started funding.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In the end, those corporations funding all those money will withdraw their profit because that\'s the reason why they started shelling out money.
I personally think rich people can eventually buy organ or something related with human body.
>> I personally think rich people can eventually buy an organ or something related with the human body.
Not like any other products, these new products are directly related with human life.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Unlike other products, these new products are directly related with human life.
Therefore the result of the gap between rich and poor will be quite different with the gap we have seen before.
>> Therefore, the result of the gap between the rich and poor will be quite different with the gap we have seen before.
I don\'t think that is a pretty scene and that\'s why I personally oppose to human cloning.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I don\'t think that will be a pretty sight to behold and that\'s why I personally oppose human cloning.
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