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I think experiential education can work well in elementary school level. When I was young, my parents brought me the national museum, national park or other places and told me stories. Those stories didn't feel like studying so I was really enjoying listening them and even asked questions. Knowledge from those experiences lasts still even though I didn't try to remember. However I don't think experiential education system will work out in middle and high school. Because from middle school, contents of education are fit for Korean SAT and curriculum becomes complicate. I don't know how experiential education can teach abstract, ideal contents like differential and integral calculus. Furthermore, to do experiential education, more money will be needed then current educational system and I don't think budget is enough to do it. I generally agree that experiential education will be helpful to elementary school students if the system is sustained by enough budget.
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Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for sharing something about this matter.
I think experiential education is a supplementary form of education for all types of students.
They say experience is the best teacher and it applies all through out our lives.
Anyhow, that is just the way I see it.
I hope you\'re doing great.
I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
^^
~Teacher Charry :)
I think experiential education can work well in elementary school level. >> CORRECT!
OR >> In my opinion, experiential education can work well in elementary school level.
When I was young, my parents brought me the national museum, national park or other places and told me stories.
>> When I was young, my parents brought me to the national museum, the national park or other places and told me stories.
Those stories didn\'t feel like studying so I was really enjoying listening them and even asked questions.
>> Those stories didn\'t feel like studying so I was really enjoying listening to them and even asked questions.
Knowledge from those experiences lasts still even though I didn\'t try to remember.
>> Knowledge from those experiences lasted even though I didn\'t try to remember.
However I don\'t think experiential education system will work out in middle and high school.
>> However, I don\'t think experiential education system will work out in middle and high school.
Because from middle school, contents of education are fit for Korean SAT and curriculum becomes complicate.
>> This is because from middle school, contents of education are fit for Korean SATs and the curriculum becomes complicated.
I don\'t know how experiential education can teach abstract, ideal contents like differential and integral calculus.
>> I don\'t know how experiential education can teach abstract and ideal contents like differential and integral calculus.
Furthermore, to do experiential education, more money will be needed then current educational system and I don\'t think budget is enough to do it.
>> Furthermore, to do experiential education, more money will be needed than the current educational system and I don\'t think the budget is enough to do it.
I generally agree that experiential education will be helpful to elementary school students if the system is sustained by enough budget.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I generally agree that experiential education will be helpful to elementary school students if the system is sustained with enough budget.
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