Homework

Hello there [이름]!

I always love you point-on-view about things.

You have a way of pointing out things in a very sensible way.

Thank you for always doing that in class and in your homework.

I hope you will continue making great essays.

See you in class tomorrow.

Take care always. ^_^

~Teacher Charry

I live in Korean society so I will write about this issue based on South Korea.

>> I live in the Korean society so I will write about this issue based on South Korea\'s situation.

I believe that the government should provide social securities and maintain other social systems well.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> In my point-of-view, the government should provide social securities and maintain other social systems well.

It\'s the reason why people pay taxes to this country.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> This is the reason why people pay their dues to the government.

I don\'t support populism or also don\'t believe the government should solve literally every problems in this society.

>> I don\'t support populism or also don\'t believe the government should solve literally every problem in this society.

However, the constitution of this country declares that the state may regulate and coordinate economic affairs.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> However, the constitution of this country states that the state may regulate and coordinate economic affairs.

It doesn\'t mean South Korea follows communism or planned economy system.

>> It doesn\'t mean South Korea follows communism or a planned economy system.

Some people can\'t survive well in this society due to many reasons like disability or unfortunate accidents etc..

>> Some people can\'t survive well in this society due to many reasons like disability, unfortunate accidents, etc..

Some people can\'t maintain a decent quality of life not because they are lazy or stupid but due to uncontrollable external factors.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Some people can\'t maintain a decent quality of life not because they are lazy or stupid but because of uncontrollable external factors.

Survival of fittest is not a proper way to protect human rights.

>> Survival of the fittest is not a proper way to protect human rights.

People should basically put their own efforts to make their own lives good but also take effort to maintain the whole society system goes well.

>> People should basically not only put their own efforts to make their own lives good but also take effort to maintain the whole society system for it to run well.