Homework

Hi there JM!

Thanks for writing this essay. It\'s been a while.

I hope that you will continue to practice your writing skills.

Kindly check the corrections below. See you in class.

~Teacher Shanee^^,

I agree that people have become more isolated by themselves for the follow reasons. 

>>> I agree that people have become more isolated for some reasons.
 First , Eventhough they are talking with someone on the website, they can\'t feel others emotions.

>>> First, even though they are talking with someone through social networking sites, they can\'t feel others emotions.

So , l\'m confident that they can\'t interact truly. 

>>> Correct! [sincerely]

 And most of users tend to blame for others instead of complimenting others behaviors.

>>> And most users tend to give negative comments about other people.

So it make them more lonely. 

>>> That causes misunderstanding and makes internet users lonelier.
 And they just make an effort to make a issue to expand visitors at their spaces like sns.

>>> Also, some people just start some issues to get other users attention.

Rather than asking others condition, they just consider that how can I expand visitors so , they sometimes uploaded funny video, violence movie and so on.

>>> Rather than checking on the conditions of their acquaintances, they just focus on getting more followers so they upload interesting videos.

I us think that it is not effective for users to talk with others. 

>>> I think that using the internet is not a good way to interact with others.
 By the reason I \'m not recommending make a freind throughout the Internet.

>>> For this reason, I\'m not recommending making friends online.