Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, James!
How are you feeling now?
This sure is one big news! How I wish we\'re younger without much responsibility, so we could also take the risk. lol
We\'ll get our chance somehow.
Thanks for sharing, James! Make a killing in your own way!
For now, take good care of yourself.
-Klein-
Who among your friends makes a killing?
How would you like to emulate him/her?
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Among my colleagues, there are some people that they make a killing and they earn the money through investing in the bit coin.
>>Among my colleagues, there are some who make a killing through investing in the bit coin.
They earn the money more than five times what they invested.
>>They earn more than five times of the money they invested.
Nowadays in Korea, many people think that bit coin investment is a good to change their life.
>>Nowadays, in Korea, many people think that bit coin investment is good to change their lives.
So they invest much money in the bit coin.
>>Correct
Actually among of them, someone became a rich man, he invested just 8 dollars at first.
>>Actually, among them, someone became a rick man, as he invested just 8 dollars at first.
But the value of bit coin is increased rapidly in present.
>>But the value of bit coin is increased rapidly at present.
So he earn much money, and his bit coin account has 31 million dollars.
>>So he earns much money, and his bit coin account has 31 million dollars.
I saw that kind of lucky person on the TV.
>>I saw that kind of lucky person on TV.
I envy him but I do not invest money in the bit coin.
>>Correct
If I were young, I try to invest in the bit coin.
>>If I were young, I would try to invest in the bit coin.
But I have to save the money for my family so I cannot invest the money in the high risk item.
>>Correct
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