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2018-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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Who among your friends makes a killing? How would you like to emulate him/her? ==> Among my colleagues, there are some people that they make a killing and they earn the money through investing in the bit coin. They earn the money more than five times what they invested. Nowadays in Korea, many people think that bit coin investment is a good to change their life. So they invest much money in the bit coin. Actually among of them, someone became a rich man, he invested just 8 dollars at first. But the value of bit coin is increased rapidly in present. So he earn much money, and his bit coin account has 31 million dollars. I saw that kind of lucky person on the TV. I envy him but I do not invest money in the bit coin. If I were young, I try to invest in the bit coin. But I have to save the money for my family so I cannot invest the money in the high risk item.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, James!

How are you feeling now?

This sure is one big news! How I wish we\'re younger without much responsibility, so we could also take the risk. lol

We\'ll get our chance somehow.

Thanks for sharing, James! Make a killing in your own way!

For now, take good care of yourself.

-Klein-

Who among your friends makes a killing?
How would you like to emulate him/her?
 ==>
Among my colleagues, there are some people that they make a killing and they earn the money through investing in the bit coin.
>>Among my colleagues, there are some who make a killing through investing in the bit coin.

They earn the money more than five times what they invested.
>>They earn more than five times of the money they invested.
Nowadays in Korea, many people think that bit coin investment is a good to change their life.
>>Nowadays, in Korea, many people think that bit coin investment is good to change their lives.

So they invest much money in the bit coin.
>>Correct

Actually among of them, someone became a rich man, he invested just 8 dollars at first. 
>>Actually, among them, someone became a rick man, as he invested just 8 dollars at first.

But the value of bit coin is increased rapidly in present.
>>But the value of bit coin is increased rapidly at present.

So he earn much money, and his bit coin account has 31 million dollars.
>>So he earns much money, and his bit coin account has 31 million dollars.

I saw that kind of lucky person on the TV.
>>I saw that kind of lucky person on TV.
I envy him but I do not invest money in the bit coin.
>>Correct

If I were young, I try to invest in the bit coin.
>>If I were young, I would try to invest in the bit coin.

But I have to save the money for my family so I cannot invest the money in the high risk item.

>>Correct

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