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2018-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

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In my opinion, I think it is depends on how healthier the animal is. If animals are not healthy, it is okay to stay in the zoo.. They can receive people’s help in the zoo. And children can watch sick animals in there. But when they are healthy, they don’t need people’s help. When they even stay in the zoo, they will miss their family and get pain. That is why we must not give pain to animals.

강사 첨삭



Hi Kiddo,

Good afternoon!

Your answers are lovely!  Thank you for having such a mature and responsible opinion about animals.

See you tonight!

Amanda ^-^


In my opinion, I think it is depends on how healthier the animal is.

>> In my opinion, it depends on how healthy the animal is.
>> OR: I think it depends on how healthy the animal is. 


 If animals are not healthy, it is okay to stay in the zoo..

>> If the animals are not healthy, it\'s okay for them to stay in the zoo.


 They can receive people’s help in the zoo. And children can watch sick animals in there.

>> Correct

>> OR: They will be taken cared of in the zoo and children will have the opportunity to watch over them.

 But when they are healthy, they don’t need people’s help. 

>> But if they are healthy, they don\'t need people\'s help. 


 When they even stay in the zoo, they will miss their family and get pain.

>> When they stay in the zoo, they will miss their family and it will make them sad.

 That is why we must not give pain to animals.

>> Correct

>> OR: That is why we should not hurt animals. We should take care of them and consider what makes them happy.


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