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2018-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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What is your all-time favorite movie? Why? My all-time favorite movie is "flipped" It was made in 2010. The story of this movie is 1st love within two boy and girl. At first the girl liked the boy. He hated the gril because she loved him plainly. So he avoided her. As time goes by, He realized that he loves her. So they love each other. the 1st reason that I like this movie is that the story is pure. and 2nd reason is that the main woman character resemble me. When I was a elementary school student, my image like her. and 3nd reason is that the sound is distinct. so I can hear their voice.

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What is your all-time favorite movie? Why?
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My all-time favorite movie is \"flipped\"
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It was made in 2010.
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The story of this movie is 1st love within two boy and girl.
>>The story of this movie is about first love within two boys and a girl.
At first the girl liked the boy.
>>correct
He hated the girl because she loved him plainly.
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So he avoided her.
>>correct
As time goes by, He realized that he loves her.
>>correct
So they love each other.
>>correct
the 1st reason that I like this movie is that the story is pure.
>>correct
and 2nd reason is that the main woman character resemble me.
>>correct
When I was a elementary school student, my image like her.
>>When I was an elementary school student, I looked like her.
and 3nd reason is that the sound is distinct. so I can hear their voice.
>>and 3rd reason is that the sound was distinct, so I can hear their voices

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