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Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?
Whether bullying should be a crime or part of growing up has been a social issue.

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some people insist that Being bullied is just one of crimes while others believe that it is a process to be mature.

>> Some people insist that being bullied is just one of the crimes while others believe that it is a process to be mature.

Both opinions are right but I prefer more the latter opinion.
>> Both opinions are right but I prefer the latter.
First, bullying someone is a cruel thing - it could hurt someone.

>> Correct

Being bullied is difficult to endure all day, and a person who has been bullied might end it all because they can become impulsive.
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In my experience, when i was a middle-school student, being bullied was helpful to me, I had been teased because I was fat.

>> Correct

However this situation made me active, I everyday worked out to be slim, and now, i have a lot of reliable friends, so that, I can say, it was a part of growing up.
>> However this situation made me active. I worked out everyday to be slim and now, I have a lot of reliable friends. So, I can say, it was part of growing up. 
In conclusion, both opinions are all right, there is not right answer.

>> In conclusion, both opinions are all right, there is no right answer.
 We just must concern how to get rid of school violence, and find ways to be mature without violence.

>> We just have to be concern on how to get rid of school violence and find ways to be mature without violence.