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2018-03-29 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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Q : Do you think texting while driving should be illegal? Why or why not? Explain your answer. A : I think texting while driving should be illegal. If I text while driving, I can not see well and the probability of a traffic accident increase. In addition it is not only the person who caused the traffic accident when it happened is injured. Like this, the behavior is very dangerous to not only one´s own self but also others. So I think texting while driving should be illegal.

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I think texting while driving should be illegal.

>> CORRECT


If I text while driving, I can not see well and the probability of a traffic accident increase.

>> If I text while driving, I won\'t see the path well and the probability of a traffic accident will increase.


In addition it is not only the person who caused the traffic accident when it happened is injured.

>> In addition, it can also lead to road traffic crash.


Like this, the behavior is very dangerous to not only one´s own self but also others.

>> That kind of behavior is very dangerous not only to oneself but also to others.


So I think texting while driving should be illegal.

>> So, I think texting while driving should be illegal.

>> OR: In conclusion, texting while driving should be illegal.

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