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Good day!
How is your day, James?
Thank you for sharing this. You sure got a point. I have to say that I at times feel the same way.
I am glad you elaborated your answer here. This is such a good practice!
Keep it up, James! You are on the right track.
Enjoy your time!
-Klein-
What do you have to say about emaciated entertainers?
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There are many entertainers in Korea.
>>Correct
They want to control their body and they try to maintain their body.
>>They want to control and maintain their body shape and size.
Male entertainers want to have a muscular body and female entertainers want to look slim.
>>Correct
Some of female entertainers diet seriously for their body shape.
>>Some female entertainers follow a diet seriously for their body shape.
Although it looks good but I think it is harmful their body.
>>Although it looks good, I think it is harmful for their body.
Emaciated entertainers looks good in the screen but when we see them actually they are very thin and it looks not good.
>>Emaciated entertainers look good on screen but when we see them actually they are very thin and don\'t look good.
I think the only reason why they diet is for screen.
>>I think the only reason they diet is for the screen.
So I don\'t like that kind of person who has emaciated entertainers.
>>So I don\'t like those kind of emaciated entertainers.
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