Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi Seong Won!
Continue celebrating your talent in this language.
I know you can develop everyday.
I\'ll look forward to reading more of your work.
I\'ll talk to you tomorrow!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Well, no. I do not have friends over the internet.
>> Correct
But maybe, I can make friends one day.
>> Correct
I\'m a member of many fan cafes, so I have many relations.
>> I\'m a member of many fan sites, so I have many contacts.
And all the cafes that I affiliate has a member at my age.
>> And all the groups that I am affiliated with have members in my age.
Also, some of the cafes has a meeting, and if I go there, I might have a chance to make friends.
>> The groups also hold meetings and if I attend, it might be a good chance to make friends.
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