Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Take me!
Many of us really dream of seeing as much as we can around the world. Some are fortunate enough to travel so much and often, while some aren\'t. I hope we belong to the first group.
I am thankful that despite such distance, we can still bridge the gap. Please take good care of yourself, so you\'d have the best health you could have at our age when you travel with your loved ones.
All the best!
-Klein-
If it were a long weekend, what would you be doing?
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If it were a long weekend, I would like to go overseas trip with my family.
>>If it were a long weekend, I would like to go on an overseas trip with my family.
>>If it were a long weekend, I would like to go overseas with my family.
I hope that I want to show my children the various world.
>>I hope to show my children various places on Earth.
So if I have time and money, I will go overseas trip without hesitation.
>>So if I have time and money, I will overseas without hesitation.
As I said, I am learning English for communicating with foreigners when I am in another country.
>>Correct
OR >> As I have said, I am learning English to communicate with foreigners when I am in another country.
I didn\'t make time for my family, because I was always busy for earning money when I was young.
>>Correct
Nowadays working and life balance becomes more important thing.
>>Nowadays, working and life balance becomes a more important thing.
So I am saving money for going overseas trip with my family.
>>So I am saving money for going overseas with my family.
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