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Essay Writing:
Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?
If children grow up in a big city, there would be several good things. First of all, a big city has various kinds of facilities. For instance, I can easily go to a hospital if my child got sick. And, if my child want to learn something, I could find a suitable teacher. However, in a countryside, It's hard to find any facilities.
Well, if children grow up in a countryside, there could be some advantages. For example, my child can get far away from a car accident.
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T. Gracelyn
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>>There will be many advantages if children will grow in a big city.
First of all, a big city has various kinds of facilities.
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For instance, I can easily go to a hospital if my child got sick.
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And, if my child want to learn something, I could find a suitable teacher.
>>If my child wants to learn something, I could find a dedicated teacher.
However, in a countryside, It\'s hard to find any facilities.
>>However these are difficult to find in the countryside.
Well, if children grow up in a countryside, there could be some advantages.
Well, if children grow up in a countryside, there could be some advantages.
>>On the other hand, there are some advantages if children will grow in the countryside.
For example, my child can get far away from a car accident.
>>For example, children might avoid car accidents.
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