Homework 8
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. Some people think that sports teaches children how to compete, while others believe that it teaches children team work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A. Sports teaches children both competition and team work. For example, in soccer game, each players run to win the game by cooperating with the team members. As the society demands us to live with others and develope ourselves, we cannot help training ourselves when we are young. Sports is a great way to learn how to live the society in the future.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bomi! Seems you are not quite busy today that you have time catching up with your homework. Nice! Thanks a lot, really appreciate it! ^ ^
I definitely agree with you. I can actually make a comparison between a child who is exposed to sports and another one who is not. And, it\'s actually easy to tell them apart since a child exposed to sports is more focused, disciplined and persevering than the later who is not. Well as far as I know. Of course there could be other factors but I think exposing children to sports is all nothing but good! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
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For example, in soccer game, each players run to win the game by cooperating with the team members.
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As the society demands us to live with others and develope ourselves, we cannot help training ourselves when we are young.
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Sports is a great way to learn how to live the society in the future.
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