homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Essay Writing:
If you could change one thing about your past, what would it be?
Well, I served Korean Army for 2 years. I think this's nessesary for this country, but 2 years ins't short at all. I could have done more things in 2 years instead of Army Service. So, If I had a chance, I wouldn't go to the Army Service. Maybe I would have graduated an university in USA. And then, finally, I could have migrated to the country. I don't know which is better; living in Korea or living in America. But, when I traveled in the States, I thought that I would be happy if I had lived there becuase of several reasons.
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T. Gracelyn
Well, I served Korean Army for 2 years.
>>Well, I served in the Korean Army for 2 years.
I think this\'s nessesary for this country, but 2 years ins\'t short at all.
>>I think it is necessary for this country. However, 2 years isn\'t short at all.
I could have done more things in 2 years instead of Army Service.
>>I could have done more things in 2 years instead of serving in the military/Army.
So, If I had a chance, I wouldn\'t go to the Army Service.
>>So if I had a chance, I wouldn\'t go to the Military Academy/Service Academy.
Maybe I would have graduated an university in USA.
>>Maybe I would have graduated in the university in the USA.
And then, finally, I could have migrated to the country.
>>I could have also migrated to that country.
I don\'t know which is better; living in Korea or living in America.
>>correct
But, when I traveled in the States, I thought that I would be happy if I had lived there becuase of several reasons.
>>However, when I went to the USA, I thought I would be happy if I live there because of several reasons.
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