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2018-04-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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What are the things that you want to see every day? ==> I want to see my family everyday. My daughter always asks me when she goes to bed, what time I will come back home tomorrow. Nowadays, I arrive at home early in the evening. so I can make time to talk with my daughter and wife. It is good to me and the change makes my family happy. I also want to see the blue sky. When I was young, it is easy to see the blue sky. But In present, air pollution is serious problem so we cannot see the blue sky easily. In weather forecasting, the announcer gives information about the air condition like a micro dust percentage. The micro dust gives us bad effect, so a lot of people wear mask for their health. Because of air pollution, I cannot see the blue sky everyday. If I can see the blue sky everyday, I will feel good emotion.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for always sharing your thoughts about every question I throw at you, James. Thank you very much!

If you really want to see the blue sky, please come here. lol Think about it. ^_^

I want you to know that I always wish you and your family well.

All the best!

-Klein-

What are the things that you want to see every day?
 ==>
 I want to see my family everyday.

 >>Correct (every day)
 My daughter always asks me when she goes to bed, what time I will come back home tomorrow.

 >>Correct
 Nowadays, I arrive at home early in the evening. so I can make time to talk with my daughter and wife.

 >>Nowadays, I arrive home early in the evening, so I can make time to talk with my daughter and my wife.
 It is good to me and the change makes my family happy.
 >>Correct
I also want to see the blue sky.
 
>>Correct

When I was young, it is easy to see the blue sky.
 
>>When I was young, it was easy to see the blue sky. (past tense)

But In present, air pollution is serious problem so we cannot see the blue sky easily.
 
>>But at present, air pollution is a serious problem, so we cannot see the blue sky easily.

In weather forecasting, the announcer gives information about the air condition like a micro dust percentage.
 
>>In the weather forecast, the announcer gives information about the air condition like the microdust percentage.

The micro dust gives us bad effect, so a lot of people wear mask for their health.
 
>>The microdust affects us badly, so a lot of people wear a mask for their health.

Because of air pollution, I cannot see the blue sky everyday.
 
>>Correct (every day)

If I can see the blue sky everyday, I will feel good emotion.

 >>If I can see the blue sky every day, I will have good emotion.

>>If I can see the blue sky every day, I will feel good.

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