homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Composition Writing:
What is your opinion about women in the military?
I think a gender is not an important thing in a job. So, there will be no problem when women work in the military. In fact, when I worked in the army service, my boss was a woman. She was strong enough to lead more than one hundred of my colleagues. Nowadays, many people think that the gender equality is very important in the society. So do I. I think that a lot of women could do better than normal men, if she's done at the best of her efforts.
Hi, T Gracelyn.
I've been being busy this week, so I'm late doing my homework. I'll do every homework until this weekend. Talk to you later.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Jake! Thank you very much for doing your homework despite your busy schedule. I really appreciate it. Don\'t worry, I understand. ^^
I\'ll talk to you later.
T. Gracelyn
I think a gender is not an important thing in a job.
>>I think gender is not important in a job.
So, there will be no problem when women work in the military.
>>correct or
>>So it will not be a problem if women will work in the military.
In fact, when I worked in the army service, my boss was a woman.
>>correct
She was strong enough to lead more than one hundred of my colleagues.
>>She was strong enough to lead more than one hundred people.
Nowadays, many people think that the gender equality is very important in the society.
>>correct
So do I.
>>correct
I think that a lot of women could do better than normal men, if she\'s done at the best of her efforts.
>>I think that a lot of women can do better than men if they will do their best and if they will exert efforts.
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