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2018-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Gracelyn

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Writing Composition: In many countries, when someone gets old, they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes governments pay for this care. Who should be responsible for our old people? Give reasons. Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice. I think goverments are partly responsible for old people. Most of old people should be taken care by their sons and daughters. But some old people have no children to rely on. So, goverments should take care of these old people. But, goverments have to make rules about it. Because they are in different situations. Someone is rich, someone is poor, someone is sick, someone is healthy. So, goverments defenitely need to make fair standards.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jake! Thank you very much for sending in your composition. Please take note of the corrections and feel free to ask questions tomorrow. 
T. Gracelyn

I think goverments are partly responsible for old people. 
>>I think the government is partly responsible for old people.
Most of old people should be taken care by their sons and daughters. 
>>Most old people should be taken care by their sons and daughters.
But some old people have no children to rely on. 
>>correct
So, goverments should take care of these old people. 
>>So, the government should take care of these old people.
But, governments have to make rules about it. Because they are in different situations.
>>However, the government has to make rules because they are in a different situation.
Someone is rich, someone is poor, someone is sick, someone is healthy. 
>>Some of them are rich, poor, sick and healthy.
So, goverments defenitely need to make fair standards.
>>So, the government definitely needs to make fair standards.

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