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2018-05-04 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Is your country a safe country? Answer in no more than FIVE (5) sentences. Yes. My country is the very safe place in the world. First, our country cancel to possession of arms. So,it is a safe from the guns. Second, our country is good at public safety. So,there are lots of policeman. Last, many foreigner thinks that our country is dangerous because North Korea. But it is not a real. Korea is very safe place so we will unification each other someday.

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Is your country a safe country? Answer in no more than FIVE (5) sentences. 
Yes.

>> Yes it is.
My country is the very safe place in the world.

>> My country is a very safe place in the world.
 First, our country cancel to possession of arms.

>> Firstly, our country does not allow the possession of guns.
So,it is a safe from the guns.

>> So, it is a gun free country.
Second, our country is good at public safety.

>> Secondly, our country focuses on public safety.
So,there are lots of policeman.

>> So, there are lots of policemen.
Last, many foreigner thinks that our country is dangerous because North Korea.

>> Lastly, many foreigners think that our country is dangerous because of North Korea.
 But it is not a real.

>> But that is not real.
Korea is very safe place so we will unification each other someday.

>> Korea is a very safe place to live in and our country will be reunited with North Korea someday.

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