homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Gracelyn.
I'm so sorry I missed your phone.
I'm in hometown that's why I couldn't recieve skpe.
By the way, I missed delaying class.
I'm sorry. I'll see you next week.
Below is a English composition.
What is your opinion about women in the military?
My opinion ...
Korean men are obliged to serve in the military.
So I think it would be okay to be able to make choices whether women or men.
There is a girl friend who was a soldier. She is working at a company in now. She sometimes says that military life has helped to make strong her life. Maybe, Some people will not so.
So I think it should be a matter of choice, not force.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [Name]. I am sad because you didn\'t attend our class. :( Anyway, I will see you on Monday. Enjoy your stay there! Take care!
T. Gracelyn
My opinion ...
Korean men are obliged to serve in the military.
>>correct
So I think it would be okay to be able to make choices whether women or men.
So I think it would be okay to be able to make choices whether women or men.
>>So I think it is okay if women will also be in the military.
There is a girl friend who was a soldier.
There is a girl friend who was a soldier.
>>I have a friend who was a soldier.
She is working at a company in now.
>>She is working in a company now.
She sometimes says that military life has helped to make strong her life.
>>She said that her experiences and training when she was in the military helped her to become a strong woman.
Maybe, Some people will not so.
>>Maybe some people will not think that way.
So I think it should be a matter of choice, not force.
So I think it should be a matter of choice, not force.
>>So I think it\'s a matter of choice.
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