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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
We can do it!
There must be many ways to success but we should carefully built our own toward it. Let\'s help one another, my friend!
Take it easy there.
Stay safe and sound!
-Klein-
Is your idea of success the same with her idea of success? If you experience failure early on when trying something new, do you tend to give up?
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I think perseverance is one of success point.
>>I think perseverance is one of the success points.
In order to be a rich man, we encounter many difficult things and we have to overcome it.
>>In order for a man to be rich, we would encounter many different things and we have to overcome them.
For that, we need the perseverance.
>>For that, we need perseverance.
And although I face the failure when trying something new, I never give up.
>>And although I face failure when trying something new, I never give up.
i will try to find why I have to fail at the moment.
>>Correct (capitalization: I)
After I find the cause, I will solve the problem by my effort.
>>Correct
This is the my way to encountered the failure.
>>This is the way to counter/overcome the failure.
>>This is my way to counter/overcome the failure.
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