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2018-05-15 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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When I search the inrernet, many people think that Shinan is most dangerous city in Korea. There was two citizens who killed two teachers who came from another city. And some of the citizens make a mentally deficient person slaves. People was very outraged by their evildoing. And I can't think about the next sentence that I have to write.

강사 첨삭

Hi Seong Won!

Thank you for putting in the effort to search for facts to write about in your composition.

I really admire your dedication to your studies.

Let\'s talk tomorrow!^^

~~ Teacher Sharon.

When I search the inrernet, many people think that Shinan is most dangerous city in Korea.
>> When I surf the inrernet, many people think that Shinan is the most dangerous city in Korea.
There was two citizens who killed two teachers who came from another city.
>> There were two citizens who killed two teachers who came from another city.
And some of the citizens make a mentally deficient person slaves.
>> And some of the citizens make slaves out of mentally deficient people.
People was very outraged by their evildoing.
>> People were outraged by their evil actions.

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