homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Essay Writing:
Do you think it's better for students to have a long summer break or be in a year-round school system with more breaks throughout the year? Explain your position.
I prefer a long vacation because students can do whatever they want during vacation. Students usually have to work part-time because they don't have enough money. And students with low grades in some subjects have to take different classes during the vacation. Finally, I think all students should have various experiences, and the vacation is the best time to experience them. Students can travel to abroad, volunteer with friends, and do internship programs. That's why I think students need to take a long vacation.
강사 첨삭
Hello there Jake. Thank you very much for sending in your homework. Please take note of the corrections and feel free to ask questions in class. ^^
I\'ll talk to you later.
T. Gracelyn
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Students usually have to work part-time because they don\'t have enough money.
>>correct
And students with low grades in some subjects have to take different classes during vacation.
>>correct
Finally, I think all students should have various experiences, and vacation is the best time to experience them.
>>correct
Students can travel to abroad, volunteer with friends, and do internship programs.
>>Students can travel abroad, do some volunteer jobs and participate to internship programs.
That\'s why I think students need to take a long vacation.
>>correct
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