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학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! I agree with what you said. Just like you, I believe that happiness is something we already have inside of us and it is something that money cannot buy. Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic! Great job! ~Teacher Elisha
I think taht happniness is lies within me.
>> I think happiness is something that lies within me.
Because I think that people can feel the happiness even in small thing.
>> I think people can find happiness even in the smallest things.
For example, I really happy when I see my son\'s smile.
>> For example, I really feel happy whenever I see my son\'s smile.
It is not relate to money or something else.
>> It is not related to money or something else.
In addition, I feel fruitful when I work in current job sometime.
>> In addition to that, I sometimes feel productive when I work at my current job.
However, I couldn\'t find out interest in previous company eventhoug it was more famous company in Korea.
>> However, my previous company doesn\'t catch my interest even though it is a more famous company in Korea.
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